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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 5:10 am Post subject: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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“ Stress has always been synonymous with soldiers involved in armed conflict and the carnage of war. Combat places tremendous psychological strain upon the individual and certain psychiatric conditions can prevent men and women from behaving as they are expected to behave. ” The veterans of of the 3 great wars, WW1, WW2 and Vietnam suffer great Post Traumatic Stress Disorder, it has affected thousands upon thousands men and sometimes women who have been in combat while going on tours of duty in the past wars.
        Early diagnosis of battle stress (as opposed to cowardice in the face of the enemy or a lack of moral fiber) has centered on battle shock or war neurosis. It is stated that over 20 percent of all wounded in the British Second Army were battle shock victims and that the 6th US Marine Division suffered 2662 wounded in ten days of fighting and also 1287 psychiatric casualties. War changes men's natures.   Abnormal men seldom commit the barbarities of war.   The tragedy of war is that these horrors are committed by normal men in situations in which the ebb and flow of everyday life have departed and been replaced by a constant round of fear and anger and blood and death.   Soldiers at war are not to be judged by civilian rules. [Wayne J Scott, 1]. That is because in war they are not just civilians, they are trained to deal with the jobs other men cannot handle. They are trained to deal with death, killing people, picking up dead body parts, coping with seeing your friend get killed and trained to kill. A lot of people have a very hard time coping with seeing people you grew up being killed in front of you, or a guy you met and became great friends with, watching him get killed or loose a limb. They go into the war as just a regular man,   but they come out as a different person. They sometimes have urges to kill people because that is what they were doing for the past 12 months to 4 years, they were killing people.
      The symptoms of PTSD are re-experiencing the traumas again flashbacks, nightmares, intrusive memories and exaggerated emotional and physical reactions to triggers that remind the person of the trauma. Emotional numbing, feeling detached, lack of emotions (especially positive ones), loss of interest in activities. Avoidance, avoiding activities, people, or places that remind the person of the trauma. Increased arousal, difficulty sleeping and concentrating, irritability, hyper vigilance (being on guard), and exaggerated startle response. These are just some to the many of different symptoms of PTSD.
      Some people have stronger reactions to PTSD than others but they have similar situations, “Anyone exposed to a severely traumatic experience is likely to have symptoms of post-traumatic stress. However, one person's symptoms may appear soon after the event, while another's may not surface for several months or maybe even for years.” One person may have relatively minor difficulty adjusting and returning to a fairly normal state, with mild and occasional flare-ups, while another might be debilitated for years to come. Even if two people are exposed to the same situation at the same time, they will have different levels of reaction.” Some of the many consequences of PTSD are physiological outcome which is neurobiological changes, psychological outcomes which target depression, conduct orders and eating disorders, social outcomes which include low self esteem, alcohol and substance abuse, homelessness and trouble with the law. The last one is self-destructive behavior and this one contains substance abuse, suicide attempts, reckless driving, self injury and in some cases sexual acts that may cause pregnancy or STDs.

              “Because PTSD has so strongly affected the brain itself, treatment often takes longer and progresses more slowly than with other types of anxiety disorders, and is most effective with a specialist in trauma recovery. It is most important to feel comfortable and safe with the therapist, so there is no additional fear or anxiety about the treatment itself”. He is basically saying that a lot of veterans won’t talk about what happened in the war it has affected them that bad. They have to be close and trust a person before they can talk to them, before they can have any conversations about something this serious. The doctors try a few different methods, one includes Cognitive-Behavioral Therapy (CBT), often including exploring personal history as well as history of the event, challenging beliefs and thoughts that lead to distress, learning to recognize and manage "triggering" episodes, and exposure or desensitization (gradual re-introduction to the event that caused the trauma). The other one is Psychotherapy may include relaxation techniques (deep breathing, muscle relaxation, positive imagery, meditation, neurofeedback, prayer, etc.) There are documented instances where relaxation was counterproductive—triggering rather than relieving symptoms. The doctors need to try as much as they can to help the patient by using these two methods, but some people will never recover. Some veterans will never have the same thought of mind as they once had. For medications they often use anti-depressants and also anti-anxiety medications. [Jaelline Jaffe, Jeanne Segal,1]

            “Traumatic experiences can produce feelings of anxiety, depression, despair, hopelessness, reoccurring anger, self-blame, guilt, and shame, as well as sexual dysfunction, compulsive or aggressive behaviors, sleep disorders, and concentration problems.” [Jaelline Jaffe, Jeanne Segal,1]    People with this disorder are really bad off, we need to stop sending our soldiers into war and causing them these horrible problems that make a lot of them in the end, end their own lives.

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:22 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Don't forget to document your first two quotes!

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:54 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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I'ma make some suggestions for you if you don't mind Evil or Very Mad

I highlighted the changes in red, so you can compare. If you see big blocks of red, don't be alarmed as there are probably only a few changes. I was too lazy to highlight each individual correction, so I just highlighted the block of text. Good Luck (read my pointers at the bottom)!

Ares wrote (View Post):
“ Stress has always been synonymous with soldiers involved in armed conflict and the carnage of war. Combat places tremendous psychological strain upon the individual and certain psychiatric conditions can prevent men and women from behaving as they are expected to behave. ” The veterans of of the 3 great wars, WW1, WW2 and Vietnam suffer great Post Traumatic Stress Disorder, it has affected thousands upon thousands men and sometimes women who have been in combat while going on tours of duty in the past wars.
        Early diagnosis of battle stress (as opposed to cowardice in the face of the enemy or a lack of moral fiber) has centered on battle shock or war neurosis. It is stated that over 20 percent of all wounded in the British Second Army were battle shock victims. Also the 6th US Marine Division suffered 2662 wounded in ten days of fighting in addition to 1287 psychiatric casualties. War changes men's natures.   Abnormal men seldom commit the barbarities of war.   The tragedy of war is that these horrors are committed by normal men in situations in which the ebb and flow of everyday life have departed and have been replaced by a constant cycle of fear, anger, blood, and death.   Soldiers at war are not to be judged by civilian rules. [Wayne J Scott, 1]. In war, they are not just civilians; they are trained to deal with the jobs which civilians cannot handle. They are trained to deal with death, killing people, picking up body parts, coping with seeing friends be killed and being trained to kill. A lot of people have a very hard time coping with seeing people whom they have grown up be killed before their eyes. It can be extremely traumatizing to see a great friend be killed or loose a limb. These soldiers go into the war as just regular men,   but they come out as different people. They sometimes have urges to kill people simply because that is what they were doing for the past 12 months to 4 years.
      The symptoms of PTSD are re-experiencing the traumas again in flashbacks, nightmares, intrusive memories, and exaggerated emotional and physical reactions to triggers that remind the person of the trauma. Certain effects of PTSD include emotional numbing, feeling detached, lack of emotions (especially positive ones), loss of interest in activities, avoidance, and avoiding activities, people, or places that remind the person of the trauma. Additionally, increased arousal, difficulty sleeping and concentrating, irritability, hyper vigilance (being on guard), and exaggerated startled responses are common effects to PTSD. These are just some to the many of different symptoms and effects of PTSD.
      Some people have stronger reactions to PTSD than others, however they occur in similar situations as is stated, “Anyone exposed to a severely traumatic experience is likely to have symptoms of post-traumatic stress. However, one person's symptoms may appear soon after the event, while another's may not surface for several months or maybe even for years.” One person may have relatively minor difficulty adjusting and returning to a fairly normal state with mild and occasional flare-ups, while another might be debilitated for years to come. Even if two people are exposed to the same situation at the same time, they will have different levels of reaction.” Some of the many consequences of PTSD are physiological outcomes in which there are neurobiological changes, psychological outcomes which target depression, conduct orders and eating disorders, social outcomes which include low self esteem, alcohol and substance abuse, homelessness and trouble with the law. The last consequence is one in which a self-destructive behavior in developed; this behavior includes substance abuse, suicide attempts, reckless driving, self injury, and in some cases sexual acts that may cause pregnancy or STDs.

              “Because PTSD has so strongly affected the brain itself, treatment often takes longer and progresses more slowly than with other types of anxiety disorders, and is most effective with a specialist in trauma recovery. It is most important to feel comfortable and safe with the therapist, so there is no additional fear or anxiety about the treatment itself”. He (who is he? use a name here instead of a pronoun, if no author is available, say something like "this statement" or "In summary.") is basically saying that a lot of veterans won’t talk about what happened in the war because it has affected them that badly. They have to be close and trust a person before they can talk to them or have any conversations about something this serious. The doctors try a few different methods including Cognitive-Behavioral Therapy (CBT), exploring personal history as well as history of the event, challenging beliefs and thoughts that lead to distress, learning to recognize and manage "triggering" episodes, and exposure or desensitization (gradual re-introduction to the event that caused the trauma). Another treatment is Psychotherapy which may include relaxation techniques consisting of deep breathing, muscle relaxation, positive imagery, meditation, neurofeedback and prayer, among others. There are documented instances where relaxation was counterproductive—triggering rather than relieving symptoms. The doctors need to try as much as they can to help the patient by using these two methods, but some people will never recover. Some veterans will never have the same peace of mind as they once had. For medications they often use anti-depressants and also anti-anxiety medications. [Jaelline Jaffe, Jeanne Segal,1]

            “Traumatic experiences can produce feelings of anxiety, depression, despair, hopelessness, reoccurring anger, self-blame, guilt, and shame, as well as sexual dysfunction, compulsive or aggressive behaviors, sleep disorders, and concentration problems.” [Jaelline Jaffe, Jeanne Segal,1]    People with this disorder are really bad off; we need to stop sending our soldiers into war and causing them these horrible problems which make many of them take their own lives in the end.

Hope you get to this before you submit it, here are a few pointers.

--Avoid using second person, phrases like "Your friend" or "See someone you grew up with." You are writing here in the third person, don't introduce anything else.

--You first paragraph about PTSD (third paragraph overall) had lots of sentence fragments, I made them into full sentences for you.

--Your second paragraph about PTSD (fourth one overall) contains 3 quotation marks? I'm confused, quotation marks can only be used in pairs, so check your quotations in that section.

--Avoid run-on sentences, and learn to use a semicolon, it will be your best friend when fixing runon sentences! If you need help learning how to properly use it, just ask me! Smile

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 7:15 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Now I know who to contact when I need some proofing done.. Very Happy

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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 7:56 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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ThEOLdGuY wrote (View Post):
Now I know who to contact when I need some proofing done.. Very Happy

g1 T

I knew my degree in English wasn't completely useless Cool

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:15 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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thanks alot TRQ Smile

i didnt expect this from any of you .. thanks alot

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:19 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Trq...your so smart.

it turns me on.

thats hott<3.

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 12:44 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Yeah rofl, Turbo!! Teach me how to use a semicolon!!! A lot of times my teacher corrects my work and puts a semicolon and I type something up on Word and it tells me not to use a semicolon lol. Good stuff. Very Happy

oO Jill.

TurboRailQueen wrote (View Post):
--Avoid run-on sentences, and learn to use a semicolon, it will be your best friend when fixing runon sentences! If you need help learning how to properly use it, just ask me! Smile

I just realized the run-on you had!

Corrected: Avoid run-on sentences and learn to use a semicolon; it will be your best friend when fixing runon sentences! If you need help learning how to properly use it, just ask me! Smile

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:55 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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lmfao dick good 1. Nice job trq, i gotta type it up here b4 i turn it in (if ya dont mind) :P

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:57 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Dick only edited himself AFTER i pointed it out to him.

Way to take credit for that one Riddickhole Rolling Eyes

Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:58 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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no idea wtf u just say but yah you riddickhole!

Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 4:56 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Hahahaha!! Pwned! Laughing

I'm sorry Turbo=(.

Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 8:54 am Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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TRQ i'm going to need some help of you soon Smile

hehe

Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:40 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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Hey, she is not your slave. Don't just pay her and expect her to help=). She helps for free! Shock

Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 5:04 pm Post subject: Re: english essay > school blocked all email sites lol

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LOL, just let me know and I'll do what I can Smile

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